When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775, to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
上面文章选自2023年高考新课标I卷续写材料:
1. 请问 that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic....
had allowed 的 had 是否不必要?
2. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.
是不是应该改成 I think you will have a good shot at this.
3. What did the horse think, as sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit?
Have doubts 是否应该改为 Had doubts?
一贴三问,如同一键三连,还无鲜花,难怪一天过去,还无人解答,以后没有鲜花的帖子,最好一贴一问,可能解决问题的速度会快点(开个玩笑,哈哈)。自从中学英语新考纲出炉,英语教学越来越倾向于在篇章中掌握语法,以前那种纯坐而论道的方式也越来越跟不上形式。不“严格”遵循传统规范语法的鲜活语料大量出现在考试之中,确实对习惯于传统语法教学,只知道照搬历史悠久的语法专著的师生产生了较大的冲击。网友的疑问,如果能换个角度思考(利用所学的语法知识来解释作者为什么这么用,而不是规定作者必须怎么用),那问题就迎刃而解:
1. 你的认为(规定应该怎么用):写作糟糕才导致老师允许作者将presentation通过肢体语言表演出来,所以老师的允许不应该发生于写作糟糕之前;
作者想表达的是(解释作者为什么这么用):写作的糟糕才导致作者的presentation要通过肢体语言来呈现,当然,这要事先经过老师的允许,所以老师允许在先,肢体呈现在后;
当然,如果你自己写文章,你去掉had,也是没有问题的,只是你和作者的表达方式不一样:你的侧重点是表示写作糟糕,导致老师不得不允许你表演你的presentation,而作者的侧重点是,写作太糟糕,以至于连presentation都要靠演!而综观全文,为了突出自己写作的糟糕,作者究竟是强调老师允许(allowed),还是强调居然连通常靠写的presentation都要靠演来实现(played all theparts)?这就是我上面说的,在语篇中掌握语法和通过语法书死抠语法规则的区别。下面提供外刊《纽约时报》的类似用法供参考:
2. 单独看这句话,用不用will都可以:用will表可能性,表示有成功的可能;而用一般现在时(陈述事实),对于成功,信心十足;但是,如果放到文章当中,则不宜用will,因为纵观全文,老师一直在拼命鼓励作者参加写作比赛,如果老师自己都不能体现/展示/显示自己的信心,岂不成了《封神》里的申公豹“道友请留步”?再次提醒,从语篇中掌握语法!
3. 这是三个问题串联一起,一气呵成,如同一键三连,你要放一起,读一遍,就知道原句没问题:
Did he get tired?(Did he)HAVE doubts?Did he want to quit?
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