我是一个初一的学生写了一篇日记:我的一天。有语法错误吗?请老师评判一下。
I get up at six in the morning. Then I have wash my face and brush my teeth. After that I had a quick beakfest. Next I go to school. I have four lessons in the morning. After classes is over, I go home. I have lunch at 12:00. I have three lessons to learn in the afternoon . I went to home at 5:00. I have done homework at home. Finary I go to bed at ten in the evening. this's all my a day.
I get up at six in the morning. Then I have wash my face and brush my teeth. After that I had a quick beakfest. Next I go to school. I have four lessons in the morning. After classes is over, I go home. I have lunch at 12:00. I have three lessons to learn in the afternoon. I went to home at 5:00. I have done homework at home. Finary I go to bed at ten in the evening. this's all my a day. (红色部分为错误或不足)
修改如下(尽量保持原样):
I get up at six in the morning. Then I wash my face and brush my teeth. After that I have a quick beakfest. Next I go to school. I have four lessons in the morning. After class, I go home. I have lunch at 12:00. In the afternoon I have three lessons to learn (本句把in the afternoon 提到句首,让句子富有变化). I go home at 5:00. I do homework at home. Finally I go to bed at ten in the evening. That's my whole day.
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