6 关于四级作文格式 用商务英语报告的方法写了四级作文 请问能拿及格分吗

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最佳答案 2021-12-19 11:13

120多字的小文章,就几句话,按照常规思路写就行,最好不要标新立异吧,否则不但不会加分很可能会减分。

审题不清,题目要求写的很清楚:Suppose you have just participated in a school-project of......you are now to write a report about the project.,这个project已经发生过了,然后写个总结报告,不是要策划一个project,所以得使用过去时态,文章里的时态全部都用错了。题目可能没读太明白,导致文中的reportprojectactivity这三个词的逻辑关系没理清。

里面用了几个“大词”,没啥必要,用一些四六级范围内的“小词”就可以了,而且看起来用的也不是很合适。句子写的比较乱,不太好改,好像还有点模版痕迹。在每个段落想表达的大致意思的基础上,试着改写了一下

The aim of the project was to collect used books for children living in remote and poverty-stricken regions, which involved a series of activities.

Mr Black, the professor of College of Arts, launched this meaningful project with the support of the headmaster.

Not only did the Students Union participate in relevant activities, they also rendered much assistance to the initiator, Professor Black. And some residents from nearby communities also appeared on the campus as participants.

The project, known as the Torch of Knowledge, kicked off as scheduled last Monday. Volunteers collected varieties of used books in many ways and mended them with care. Plus, they also purchased some brand-new ones thru e-commerce platforms. And then all the books collected were handed over to Professor Black, which would be donated to those children in mountainous areas.

The books, be it new or used ones, would be a great help to those in need. …

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  • 勒布朗 提出于 2021-12-18 16:04

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