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As is vividly depicted in the left picture above, three decades ago, a young mother held the small hand of her daughter who was carefree and happy. Contrarily, in the picture on the right, the little girl has become a beautiful youngster, supporting her old mother. The cartoonist aimed to highlight the idea that each of us should take responsibility for filial piety.

There is no denying that everyone will become old and need other people help. For the one hand, if young people only enjoy themselves and don't care for their parents, it could violate the relative law and Chinese traditional morality. When they get old, their children may simulate the behavior and attitude of the former and not take responsibility and obligation. For the other hand, if adolescents consciously look after the senior, the latter may feel that they haven't wasted money and time on their children. If possible, the elderly could help them in material and spiritual terms.

All in all, it is we that should seriously perform filial piety. Thus, parents and teachers should make combined efforts to guide students, while young people should take responsibility for looking after their elders. Only in these ways would the young have a hopeful future and society become more harmonious.

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最佳答案 2021-12-16 20:46

这种套用模板的作文,注意句子之间的衔接,正确使用句子结构就可以了。内容稍显空洞,我只在字面上稍作修改,供你参考。

As is vividly depicted in the left picture above, three decades ago, a young mother held the small hand of her daughter who was carefree and happy. Then the picture on the right shows that the little girl has become a beautiful young lady, supporting her old mother. The cartoonist aims to highlight the idea that one should fulfil one's filial duty to one's parents.

There is no denying that everyone will become old and need other peoples help. On the one hand, if young people only enjoy themselves and don't care for their parents, it will violate both the relevant law and Chinese traditional morality. When they get old, their children may simulate their behavior and attitude and fail to take the filial duty to them. On the other hand, if adolescents consciously look after the senior, the latter may feel that they haven't wasted money and time on their children. If possible, the elderly will help them in material and spiritual terms.

All in all, it is we that should consciously perform filial piety. Thus, parents and teachers should make combined efforts to guide students, while young people should take responsibility to look after their elders. Only in these ways will the young have a hopeful future and the society become more harmonious. 

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  • 英语小学徒 提出于 2021-12-15 23:46