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As is vividly depicted in the picture above, a youngster is sitting in front of a computer, seriously considering whether he should choose the course of new, creative and difficult knowledge or the course of high credit, easy passing and less homework. The cartoonist aims to highlight the idea that it is important for a young undergraduate to choose a proper goal.

There is no denying that most people prefer controllable things to difficult ones. On the one hand, if straight-A students select an easy passing course, it may give him or her benefit in the short-term, but in the long-term it would be harmful to his or her further development. When encountering a complex problem related to knowledge of the difficult course, the young people maybe regret the former selection, cannot solve the issue and have a bad influence on his or her confidence. On the other hand, if a poor student chooses a highly difficult course, he or she could fail to understand the teacher's interpretation, acquire less knowledge and hardly pass the exam of the course, which gives the adolescent an extra burden.

All in all, appropriate choices are beneficial to the development of undergraduates. Thus, teachers and parents should make combined efforts to guide and encourage youngsters, while young people cultivate self-control and self-discipline. Only in these ways can undergraduates have a good future and society become more harmonious.

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猴哥英语 - 英语培训师

文章最大的问题是逻辑问题,每句话互相衔接,相互衔接的几句话又构成上一层相互衔接的整体。你的主题是什么,是要选择合适的目标,那么你接下来就要为何要选择,或为何这样很重要,或怎么去选择。你看你的论证部分就偏离了。最后的结论,合适的选择对毕业生很收益,上面的论证有这样的地方吗,我没找到这么有益的。

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