我训练学生时，特别注重他们的基本功训练，而你这篇文章在这方面有些不足，所以我借用来作为范例了，因此我也礼尚往来把修改发给你，供参考。

要注意，不同的考试，评分标准会有些不同，我这里只从写作（而非应试）的角度提供修改建议。很多时候，改文章比写文章难很多，所以这里只对句子的基本语法和语义是否简单明了两方面进行修改。红色是改动部分，绿色是修改建议，供参考。

A man may lead a horse to the water, but he cannot make it drink

The wise saying, "A man may lead a horse to the water, but he cannot make it drink." means that there is always something that can't be satisfactory, no matter how much we force it. I'd like to share my opinion about the reason reasoning behind the saying and the learning lesson to we be gained can from get it.

I want to point out two main reasons which are: the violation of objective laws and the neglect of subjective initiative.

Everything has it's its own objective law. The best way to tackle them it is to respect their these laws, for the objective laws can not cannot be changed. For example, the children learns learn by imitation. So when we want to teach them something, being a role model and doing it first is always the most efficient way.

We human humans have subjective initiative. The horse in the saying mentioned can be compared to the student. It's important to inspire Inspiring the subjective initiative in the education is important. Thus, we say, "Interest is the best teacher." At work, the same reason reasoning works. We finish the task better when we think highly well of it. heartily.

So, the next time we lead the horse to the river, we should aslo think about whether it is thirsty.

修改建议，仅供参考