我昨天得了感冒妈妈带我去医院看了病,吃了感冒药,今天病好了。我今天去学校上学了。
I had a cold yesterday. Mum took me to the hospital to see a doctor. I took some medicine for a cold. I'm fine today and went to school.
我觉得这里用fine或good意思不对,而且时态也不对。老师评判一下。最后一句能否改为:I got well and go to school today.
I had a cold yesterday. Mum took me to the hospital to see a doctor. I took some medicine for a cold. I'm fine today and went to school.
(1)have 表状态,不是一时的动作,改成caught 才对;
(2)for a cold 说 for my cold 可以;前文已经说了是感冒,还要吃别的药么?
(3)划线的这两句,不能用and连,做成两个分句可以:I'm fine today. I went to school. 然后是。。。
(4)因为你是写便条, 你得顺着时间流向这顺序,否则就怪了
-----------------写便条-------上学--------------------->
I felt better today so I decided to go to school. …
I felt better today so I needed to go to school. …
Today, I felt better and I decided to go to school. …
Today, when I felt better and I decided to go to school. …
## feel better是康复后常用的话,可能全好,也可能是好转
I got well and go went to school today.
注意,你不能说 I go to school today. (X)