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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the problems of shared bicycles and the countermeasures. You should write at least 120 words but not more than 180 words.
With the science and technology developing, a huge number of shared bicycles has emerging in our cities. When theses bicycles have brought us a few of benefits they also have caused some of problems.
For instance, some of shared bicycles are added to hutongs while there have been very narrow. Moreover, many of cities were clean and tidy, but now they have become confused and disorderly——residents are so sad.
For this, how do we need to do? To begin with, certain government departments should take a series of measures to manage company of shared bicycles. Furthermore, firms of shared bicycles should examine their own behaviors themselves.
Ultimately, I believe the companies and the departments must been successful to deal with these problems.
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With the science and technology developing, a huge number of shared bicycles has
With the develoment of science and technology, a great number of shared bicycles have
emerging in our cities. When theses bicycles have brought us a few of benefits they also
emerged in our cities. While these bicycles have brought us many benefits, they have also
have caused some of problems.
caused some problems.
For instance, some of shared bicycles are added to hutongs while there have been very
For instance, some bicycles are placed in narrow hutongs and make it difficult to pass
narrow. Moreover, many of cities were clean and tidy, but now they have become
through them. Moreover, the previous clean, tidy cities have now become a mess, the
confused and disorderly——residents are so sad.
residents have complained.
For this, how do we need to do? To begin with, certain government departments should
What should we do to solve these problems? To begin with, government departments
take a series of measures to manage company of shared bicycles. Furthermore, firms of
should take effective measures to supervise the companies which own these shared
shared bicycles should examine their own behaviors themselves.
bicycles. Furthermore, these companies should behave themselves.
Ultimately, I believe the companies and the departments must been successful to deal
I believe the government departments and the companies will be able to succeed in
with these problems.
dealing with these problems.
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