1 中译英请教

下面首先给出了一段中文,然后我根据中文翻译了英文,请老师帮助检查一下翻译有没有错误(语法、结构、用词等),或者哪个地方翻译的不合适。

中文原稿:

研究者认为,子女抚养方面的阶级差异正在扩大,这是不平等现象加剧的一个征兆,将会有深远的影响。不同的养育方式会将孩子置于不同的发展路径,并加深社会经济的差距,尤其是考虑到教育与收入有很强的关联。孩子成长过程中,会学到在其所处的社会经济阶层内取得成功的技能,但不一定会学到其他技能。

我的翻译:

It is believed by researchers that class gap in children raising is increasing, which is an omen of  more severe unequal phenomenon and can make a  profound difference. Various ways of breeding would put children on different growing paths and deepen social economic status disparity, especially taking into account that education is linked with income. Youngers  can learn the skills that needs for their success in their own classes during their growing process, but would not necessarily acquire  other techniques.

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最佳答案 2018-03-30 08:53

Moster网友的译文相当不错,可供你参考。唯独最后一句the child改为人称代词he更好。我在你译文基础上做最小的改动,更接近你的原翻译,也供你参考。


The researchers believe that the difference in child raising between differrent social classes is becoming greater, which is an omen of  the agravation of social inequality and will lead to profound consequencies. Different ways of child raising will put children on different paths of gowing and worsen their social-economic disparity, especially in the case that education is closely linked with income. During their growth youngers can learn skills that are needed for their success within their own social class, but will not necessarily acquire other skills.


1 这里的研究者应该是前文提到的一些研究者,属于特指,应加定冠词。believe用被动句没有道理,改为主动句。

2 建议使用difference between A and B in C这样的句型。

3 deepen与disparity不搭配,改为worsen。

4 take into account不可后接that从句,改为in the case that。

5 during介词短语移至句首,避免误读为定语从句的状语。

6 that needs应为that are needed.

7 would均改为will。研究者认为他们的反映的是真实情况,故用陈述语气。


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Researchers believe that the class differences in child support are expanding, which is a sign of increased inequality and will have far-reaching consequences. Since the nurturing ways varies, children will develop themselves in different paths, which will deepen the socio-economic gap, especially considering that education and income are strongly related. As a child grows up, the child will learn useful skills in his or her socioeconomic class, but the child is not sure to learn other skills.

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